[전화영어 영작숙제] Happiness

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Happiness

There is a lot of definition of happiness. It is One of thoese sentence "Money can not buy happiness." I agree with that sentence, but nowadays people look as believe Money can buy happiness. So that they try to meansure their finicial power with other people and some of them ignore peope who poor then them.  But i am not believe they are really happy because Comparing make people unhappy.

I am not rich, but I feel happy when i do what i want to do and spend time with my familly and close friends. But i know, feeling happy i need money to affored what i want to and protect to.

Nowaday i am intrested in picture. So that  i take a camera class and the class main subject is "taking picture of daily life". I learn again what is happiness, happiness is just normal daily life so that we can not buy happiness.

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Happiness

There are a lot of definition of happiness. One of these is "Money can not buy happiness." I agree with that sentence, but nowadays people believe that money can buy happiness. So that they try to compare their financial power with other people and some of them ignore peope who are poorer than them.  But I don't believe they are really happy because comparing makes people unhappy.

I am not rich, but I feel happy when I do what I want to do and spend time with my familly and close friends. But I know, I need money to afford what I want and to support my family financially.

Nowadays I am interested in taking pictures. So I join a camera class and the class' main subject is "taking picture of daily life". I learned again that happiness is just normal daily life so that we can not buy happiness.

1. a lot 이라는 복수의 의미가 있을땐 there are!!
2. 단어 스펠린 주의하기
3. 반복되는 단어가 있을 땐, 대명사를 이용하여 반복 피하기 (  not to be redundatnt)
4. 스펠링 주의!!
5. 나는 I / I'm 은 어느 위치에 있던지 항상 대문자로 써야함.

 

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